Hello. My name is Ether, and I am a sorcerer of Torch. If you are reading this, tell nobody about what you are going to see. This is the story about the city Torch. A very rather pleasant place that is filled with very many mysterious things! Once you go there, you can not forget about what you saw. It all started with a young boy named Adam. He was very clever but didn’t know much about the city. Once he entered, the light blinded him. The light was a guardian of Torch. It did that because it sensed evil.
great job, good punctuation
Like the beginning, very good hook but, I wish I could read more.
I am making a Torch 2
I like how your talking to the audience overall great story nice job.
I think it is vary funny.
Liked the story very much
loved the story thought it was really good