One day I was grounded from my video games. My mom told me I had to go clean the attic so I got a ladder and climbed up to the attic. While I was cleaning I found something in the corner of my eyes. It was a game it looked like an old game. I snuck down the ladder and went to my friends house to play the game. When it logged me into the game your character had red cloths. You have to walk down a pavement sidewalk and collect coins. I started sinking when I fell into water.
Hello Brandon this was a great 100 WC you could have improved on your story line but I enjoyed the story especially the gaming theme
Awesome job, but I suggest that you put a comma after “One day”.