week #24 Soooooo

“Mom I’m thirsty.” said little

“Well you can have some tea.” said mom

“But when?”

“I what it now!”

But little did that little boy know that behind some bushes was a giant and magical teacup.¬† As Little was ranting on about¬† how hungry and thirsty he was he turned a corner and everything became silent. His mouth dropped and for some strange reason his eyes started to water it eyes it was like he had never seen a drink before in his life. So he jumped into the giant teacup and then the teacup fell and went all over………….

2 thoughts on “week #24 Soooooo

  • March 18, 2018 at 7:26 am
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    Hi Tristan! Thank you for taking the time to post on the 100WC. I enjoyed your hook at the start using speech and you used some precise vocabulary (ranting). You are also very good at giving small details (his mouth dropped). To make your writing even better next time, remember to give your work a quick check for sense and missing punctuation. What on earth will happen to Little now? Lots of questions! Well done.
    Mrs. T. Wiltshire UK. (Team100)

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  • March 20, 2018 at 12:33 pm
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    I like how you included dialog in your story but i did see a little thing you said i what it now instead of want aside from that your story was really good.

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