One day I was at my house watching TV and the power went out and the house was black all black and my mom yelled duck down! I felt the house shaking side to side. It was an earthquake! After five minutes was over and everything was wrecked, my house, everything, I was sad. I was worried about my friends Angel, Cruse, and Roman. “Are they OK?” I walked around. My mom was OK. My sis is OK. Good. My dog is OK. Good. This was weird. I checked the earthquake scale. It was a big one, but we survived!
Ben,
The narrator in your story seems to be very caring and concerned. As scared as the narrator was, they still took time to make sure their friends, family members, and pets were ok. What a relief, too.
Keep writing.
Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA
Thank you Mrs G it was rilly hard
BEN 55756