On a sunny day, I was walking on a pavement surface to the park. When I arrived I decided to go up the ladder so I could see the nice view. I look to my right and I saw a baby duck sinking in the water so I decided to save the baby duck. I was running as fast as I could and suddenly I saw all of my coins from my pockets we’re falling out and leaving a trail of coins. I jumped in the pond to save the baby duck and got my red shorts all soaking wet.
I liked the way you highlited the words so that they stood out although if you jumped in a pond then all your clothes would be wet not just your shorts
Looks good but I would make it a little more details.
Kia ora Graciela. Well done, I really enjoyed your 100 Word Challenge. What an eventful day at the park! You’ve included some great description like ‘I look to my right’ and ‘leaving a trail of coins’. These add detail that make your work interesting to read. Keep up the super writing Graciela!