I was walking down the pavement sidewalk home from school. My school looked red like a barn. Today my family would go swimming! When I got home my dad was on a ladder installing cable. When my brother finally got ready for the trip I said ” What took so long?,”
” I had to make sure my army men weren’t sinking in quicksand.,”
” Whatever.,” I replied. On the way to the lake When we got out of the truck I asked my dad for some change to water for me and my brother. He said yes but I dropped the coins.
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