Watch Out For That Tree

one day I went in the woods with my famly. we saw a tree in the woods. My mom said watch out for that tree. then I fell off my bike . We had to get a bandage for me. My mom and dad said are you okay. I said I am okay I said.Then we went to get some ice crem at the stroy. We went on the path to go home.There was a pool in the woods. My sister and my brother want to go to the park. We went on the swing. We had a fun in the park.

2 thoughts on “Watch Out For That Tree”

  1. You did a funominal job. One little comment is that when you said “I said ok I said” I would delete one of the I said. And I also didn’t understand the part where you said at the story. Also in the part where it said “ we had a fun in the park. Did you mean to say we had a lot of fun in the park. You did an amazing job though. With all the mistakes that I found you did an amazing job still!

  2. Good job on the story. I was really confused on the ” I said I’m ok I said,” but over all on the mistakes good job.

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