the broken instrument

I was walking home one day from school wishing it wasn’t 12 hours long.  I went to stop for a look at the candy store but, there was no candy store only a dark ally. I saw there was something. Also a instrument playing. It was playing completely out of tune. I went to see who it was and it was a sad and lonely man with a mask. His finger nail on one of his fingers was off. I gave him a ban-aid. After a few days I finely took off his mask. Razor teeth was everywhere. He ate me.

4 thoughts on “the broken instrument

  • February 14, 2019 at 1:37 pm
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    Your 100wc was really good I liked how it was scary.

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    • March 6, 2019 at 1:35 pm
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      Thank you. I am thinking of making a scary story series.

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  • February 24, 2019 at 12:33 am
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    Ooh Lilian, this sounds scary. I’m also concerned about your long 12 hour day!
    Reading these three sentences …….
    ‘ I saw there was something. Also a instrument playing. It was playing completely out of tune.’
    I wonder if you could think of a way to ‘show, not tell’ what you saw and heard in one sentence. What do you think?
    Thanks for sharing,
    Jackie (Team 100 WC)
    New Zealand

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    • March 6, 2019 at 1:36 pm
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      thanks for the feed back will try to use show not tell

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