Jack and Billy, Billy and Jack

Once upon a time before the grass grew and before the sun lay in the sky there was a goat. And that goat was all alone in this world. As well as a boy named Jack.They were both alone in this world but that was about to change…..

One day Jack was hunting and snuck up on this goat ready to kill him but instead made him his best friend! They were Jack and Billy, Billy and Jack and they were a team. Until one day… They were both suffering so much and they both died……

Jack + Billy, Billy + Jack

3 thoughts on “Jack and Billy, Billy and Jack

  • October 7, 2018 at 4:47 am
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    I would have loved you to be able to write more than 100 words for this! You start off in a style that is very similar to a fable, which gives the reader the idea that you are going to tell the story of how they became, but you don’t get round to it! When is the next part coming?!

    An excellent start. I especialy loved the part about before the grass and before the sun! Great writing. Maybe next time you could plan your writing first to make sure that you finish within the word limit.

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  • October 26, 2018 at 10:17 am
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    l like it so mach

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